For example, which sentence is stronger:
- I read the suspect his rights as a patrolman started cuffing him.
- I Mirandized the suspect as a patrolman cuffed him.
Your cure?
Choose your words carefully and use strong verbs.
Weakest verb forms: forms of the verb "to be" and "to have" and any verb ending in —ing;
Mediocre verbs: —ed endings are mediocre; and,
Strongest verb forms: roots
As verb strength depends on the constructs around them, this can vary:
- I Mirandized the suspect as a patrolman cuffed him.
- I Mirandized the suspect as a patrolman started to cuff him.
The second instance uses the root, but started to adds cumbersome syllables. So we work it:
- I Mirandized the suspect and ordered the patrolman to cuff him.
Once again we learn that the rules of writing can be a cause of baldness, as authors pull out their hair. That’s why the literary arts aren’t called the literary sciences.
